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  1. 18th September 2011, 01:37 AM #25
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    Quote sufyan81 said: View Post
    بہت ہی ثقیل شعر ہے
    میرے جیسے ممبرز کو تو سمجھو باؤنس ہی جائے گا
    اور ہاں توقیر بھائی کارل میں جب اردو تحریر کی سیٹنگ کرو تو لائن کا استعمال کرو۔۔۔۔ اس سے الفاظ کی ترتیب عمدہ رہتی ہے
    جیسے آپ کے دوسرے مصرع میں یعقوب کی سیٹنگ کچھ گڑبڑ ہوگئی۔۔ اور اسی مصرع میں آخر والا "ہیں" کچھ نیچے چلا گیا ۔۔ پہلے مصرع میں ذکاء میں "کا" کچھ نیچے آگیا ہے۔۔ بھائی بہت ہی معذرت کے ساتھ کچھ اصلاح کی کوشش کی ہے محسوس مت کرنا
    کوئی بات نہیں بھائی. اصلاح کرنی چاہئے لیکن یہ جو سٹائل میں نے بنایا ہے یہ وہ سٹائل ہے جو اخبارات وغیرہ میں ہوتا ہے کہ کم جگہ میں زیادہ الفاظ کو ترتیب دینا ہے. لفظوں کی سیٹنگ کوئی گڑبڑ نہیں ہوئی ہے یہ اخبار سٹائل میں شعر لکھا ہے. شکریہ
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    nice......superb
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    Asslamo Alaikum!

    Jazak Allah toqeer bhai, bohat achay.
    ALLAH GIVES AND FORGIVES HUMAN GETS AND FORGETS
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    بہت عمدہ
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    Quote Khurram Farooq said: View Post
    hmmmmmmmmmm
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    بہت عمدہ میرا فیورٹ شعر
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